the tension unvoiced,
conversation rolling over tender memories
not really crushing,
but brushing sensitivities exposing rawness
poignantly stressed,
avoiding the still desired but unspeakeable
not tragedian,
but a willed embracing of the love thats left
warm animation
ebbs and flows beneath layers of conflict
emanating through
ripples of occasional unguarded humour
a dance of sunlight
and shadow on their faces, contrasting echoes.
© 2011 Poetry by Paul Dorkin. All rights reserved.
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And the question is how to live not how to recover
ReplyDeleteI know that the need to will an embrace of what's left is negatively based, would you rephrase it? I think it would affect the pathos of the poem, which might be much better :-)
ReplyDeleteMaybe a few more stanzas to alter the emphasis
An emotional tableau exposing how our happiness and sadness is not circumstantial but influenced by temperament
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